Talk:The Problem Solverz/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Johanna (talk · contribs) 15:41, 15 April 2016 (UTC)

Third on my "to review" list. Johanna^{(talk to me!)} 15:41, 15 April 2016 (UTC)

• How's everything going, Johanna? 23W 23:21, 30 April 2016 (UTC)

• @23W: Sorry, I had other stuff going on, and then I decided to wait until the third round of the GA Cup began. Here are my comments. Johanna^{(talk to me!)} 00:58, 1 May 2016 (UTC)

Comments

• Instead of "from Cartoon Network", I would say "which aired on Cartoon Network".
• You can remove "problem-solving" as that's what detectives are by definition
• "Jones is a member of the art collective Paper Rad." This sentence comes out of nowhere, and I don't see how it's relevant.
• I notice nothing about the series' cancellation from CN's or Netflix's schedules, both in the lead and the article. Could you include something?
• What do you mean that the characters were created "as a response"?
• "For television Jones..." how is this relevant, particularly to what you were just discussing?
• It's up to you, but I wouldn't add that Adult Swim is the nightly division of the network.
• "The plan was pulled off..." A lot of things wrong here. First, this phrasing is informal. Also, what "plan", and who was involved? I'm confused.
• "Writing was the lengthiest facet" I'm a bit confused
• It seems like critics have noted the bright art style, but unless a specific one has made the comparison to Paper Rad, I would remove that part from the image caption.
• Remove the clause "Rather than battle it" and separate the two remaining independent clauses with a semicolon.
• I would add the critical consensus back at the top of "Reception".
• Your refs are impeccable. For an article of this length, I don't think I've seen such consistently reliable and well-formatted sources. None of them are broken. Nice job on that!
  • Johanna I think I've provided for all comments. Thank you so much for reviewing! I think my referencing skills are all muscle memory at this point, heh. 23W 01:56, 1 May 2016 (UTC)

• @23W: Wonderful work. Pass. Johanna^{(talk to me!)} 02:18, 1 May 2016 (UTC)