Talk:Swim Good/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Status (talk · contribs) 02:12, 19 June 2012 (UTC)

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I will conduct a full review of the article on Wednesday. Statυs (talk) 02:12, 19 June 2012 (UTC)

Lead

• The song received mostly positive reviews from music critics and was praised by some for its highly dark subject matter and Ocean's singing talent. --> The song received generally positive reviews from music critics, who praised Ocean's vocals and the song's dark subject matter.

Changed.

• When Nostalgia, Ultra was expected to be released as an EP by Def Jam, "Swim Good" was released as the second single, though the EP release was later cancelled. --> This really has no relevance to the article, especially since the first sentence simply states: released as the second single from his mixtape Nostalgia, Ultra (2011).

Removed.

• #70 - number 70

Doe.

• Should specify that Billboard is a U.S. chart. Not everybody knows this. Billboard should also be linked.

Done.

• The song received a music video directed by Australian director Nabil Elderkin released on September 16. --> Very awkwardly worded. I don't think the date the video was released in particularly relevant, considering the release date of the single itself wasn't even mentioned.

Date removed.

• Ocean performed the track during his seven show tour through North America and Europe. --> When?

Added.

Background

• I made the adjustments here myself, as I didn't find them to be anything major.

Thank you!

Content

• Lyrical content or Composition would be a much more appropriate title.

Suggestion applied.

• Sample is too long. According to its length, it should be around 25 seconds.

New sample added.

Music video

• How about merging this with live performances and just call it promotion? The sections are rather small. This is just a suggestion.

Merged.

Chart performance

• This little sentence could be just included in reception, as there is critical reception and public reception (which would be a song charting). This, too, is just a suggestion.

Done.

References

• I am seeing some reference issues.
• Ref 4 & 13 - work is iTunes Store, publisher is Apple Inc.
• Ref 12 & 15 are the same.
• Ref 18 - Pitchfork Media is italicized, when it should not be. Publisher for all Pitchfork Media refs is Ryan Schreiber.
• Ref 19 - work is Billboard, publisher is Prometheus Global Media.
• Ref 20 - work is Ultratip, publisher is Hung Medien / hitparade.ch.

All corrected I believe.

Verdict

• Everything looks good to me. Great work! Passing the article. Statυs (talk) 19:23, 20 June 2012 (UTC)