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Latest comment: 3 years ago by EMsmile in topic Text block removed

Further work to be done

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I am listing some further work to be done, hopefully someone has time for it:

  • Work on the lead so that it is a good summary of the article. There should be no content in the lead that is not also in the article; and not too much detail in the lead. The lead should be about 4 paragraphs long.
  • Look for use of the word "we" and replace with different wording that sounds more encyclopedic and not like an essay.
  • Add some images (photos and maps (maps from SDG tracker)).
  • Add page numbers to the exact location in the reports that were cited (this is not critical but nice to have).
  • Check and rearrange wording where it says e.g. "Organisation X stated that Ghana is major problems.[5] " we can normally change it to "Ghana has major problems.[5]" because the reference in [5] would say which organisation and year it was. However, when it's a huge important org, like WHO, then sometimes it sounds more impressive to leave it as "WHO stated that". But check, since we are not writing a literature review but an encyclopedia.
  • The third paragraph under "progress" needs a citation. It may also need simplifying of the language.
  • More wikilinks to other Wikipedia articles should be added (in the lead, then in the first section and possibly again towards the end; but not each time where the word appears). Also add wikilinks from those other articles back to the SDG 2 article where appropriate (I have started to do that for hunger already).
  • Perhaps add a couple of external links at the very end (but not more than 1-4). EMsmile (talk) 15:16, 2 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

Accomplished Tasks

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Third paragraph of the progress has been cited, added wikilinks, reduced spaces where necessary, added punctuations and custodian agencies. James Moore200 (talk)

Text block removed

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I've removed this text block that had been added by a new editor in 2021 because I felt it was digressing too much from SDG 2 and not written in encyclopedic style.

EMsmile (talk) 13:41, 13 March 2023 (UTC)Reply