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Latest comment: 12 years ago by 11JORN in topic GA Review

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Soul Sound/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:50, 5 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Comments

  • "during her trip to" -> "during a trip" (unless you're sure she's only ever made on trip there?)
  • "where she was inspired to compose it based upon her experience there." seems a little weak, maybe "based on her experiences there."
  • "The song was released" -> "It was released...
  • As this is (or should be) written in Brit Eng, demeanor should be demeanour.
  • ""Soul Sound" at Manchester Ampersand and" what is this? And why is Manchester linked?
  • ", having peaked at number" ->", peaking at"
  • "controversially " you mention that twice but don't explain it.
  • " in London, England" no need to link common geographical terms.
  • Picture used in the Reception section seems arbitrary and unrelated.
  • "unsatisfied" or "dissatisfied"?
  • Ref 3 should be The Herald, not Herald Scotland.
  • Sydney Morning Herald should be The Sydney Morning Herald.

I'll put it on hold for a week to see if these issues get resolved. Let me know when you're done. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:33, 13 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

All  Done. Jorn talk 20:16, 13 August 2013 (UTC)Reply