Talk:Richard Raaphorst/GA1

GA review

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Nominator: AdobongPogi (talk · contribs) 14:27, 24 June 2025 (UTC)

Reviewer: DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk · contribs) 05:07, 1 August 2025 (UTC)

Hey! I will be reviewing this. It looks like you did a great job :) Before I start my full review, there is a tag on "Selected filmography" as it does not have sources, and some of the information is not featured in the career section and thus is completely unsourced. Could you please source the section (and remove/hide entries where there is no source) and then I will do a full review? :) DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 05:07, 1 August 2025 (UTC)

Hello @DaniloDaysOfOurLives, thanks for taking the time to review. I'll work on it later or soon after I finish my personal work, but the selected filmography section I've already fixed it. AdobongPogi ^{masarap 🍛} 07:27, 1 August 2025 (UTC)

Hello again, @DaniloDaysOfOurLives pinging you since the article has been fixed, and I think it's ready for review (it you check it) whenever you have time. No rush at all thanks again! AdobongPogi ^{masarap 🍛} 09:32, 5 August 2025 (UTC)

Hey, I am so sorry for my lateness. I have been having some personal issues and hence I was unable to do the review. I will do it now. Thank you so much for pinging me :) DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 07:04, 7 August 2025 (UTC)

Review:

Hey, well done on the article! Earwig shows no copyright issues so I will go straight in with my comments:

Lead: There are several references and works cited in the lead that should be moved down to the main body.

Early life:

1. "attended at Graphic Lyceum" - The "at" needs to be removed. Also, could you please clarify what "Graphic Lyceum" is?
2. "the short film Zombi 1 as part of his studies" - Could you please clarify this? Did he create/direct/star in the film as part of his studies?
3. " He studied at the Willem de Kooning Academy and attended at Graphic Lyceum" - Can you please clarify if these were at the same time or elsewhere?
4. Is there any information on what he studied/got a degree in?
5. Is there any information on his family or other early life info?

Career:

1. "He spent years designing and developing ideas for his project Worst Case Scenario, directing the short film adaptation in 2004." - This needs a source.
2. "who experiences a surreal moment" - Could this please be clarified?
3. "and was screened at the Rotterdams Open Doek Festival in 2016" - Could you please clarify if the short film or the festival was screened there?
4. "The film premiered at the Netherlands Film Festival and was later screened at the International Film Festival Rotterdam on 2 and 4 February 2012" - Could you please clarify if it was screened at the ITFR on 2 and 4 February or if the 2nd was at the NFF and the 4th was the IFFR?
5. "The project would have focused on Wehrmacht soldiers reinforced by zombie troops, fighting in a prequel titled Army of Frankenstein (which was later renamed and reworked into Frankenstein's Army)" - I am a bit confused by this sentence, particularly "fighting in a prequel" and the fact that it was reworked - could you please clarify this?
6. "He was nominated and won" - What was he nominated for?
7. "Raaphorst and writer Eron Sheean announced that his upcoming film Möbius" - I would change "his" to "their"
8. I am a bit confused on how Möbius has won awards despite filming not being complete?
9. The last paragraph needs the tense changed to past tense (or, if it is in present tense, it needs "As of")

Filmmaking style:

1. "especially influenced by early experiences such as constructing puppets from dolls" - I am a bit confused by this - does it mean that he used to construct puppets from dolls?
2. "the marriage of war and grotesque fantasy" - This seems a bit too poetic/metaphorical, could you please quote it or rephrase it?

1. "In 2020, Raaphorst attempted to revive his earlier abandoned project Worst Case Scenario by launching a crowdfunding campaign for a graphic novel adaptation of the story." - Is there any update on what happened to this?
2. "On 10 May" - Can you please clarify which year?

Once these have been done I will do a source spotcheck. Please let me know if you have any questions at all or need assistance! DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 14:04, 7 August 2025 (UTC)

Hello @DaniloDaysOfOurLives I'm done. I've fixed a lot of these issues and made changes to several sections of the article. You could check it if you have time. Thanks! AdobongPogi ^{masarap 🍛} 09:22, 8 August 2025 (UTC)

Hey, I am so so sorry for the lateness. I have been experiencing health issues and I missed your update. Thank you so much for your changes. I have spotchecked Sources #7, #9, #24, #26, #46 and #53. Well done! DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 08:57, 31 August 2025 (UTC)

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