Talk:Pete Conrad/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: CycloneIsaac (talk · contribs) 00:51, 19 February 2018 (UTC)

Reviewing later.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 00:51, 19 February 2018 (UTC)

• 92% for the copyvio detector, but seemed like the site copied from Wikipedia.
• The lead should mention a bit about his post-NASA career.
  • Expanded a significant amount Kees08 (Talk)
• "From the beginning, Pete Conrad was clearly a bright, intelligent boy, but he continually struggled with his schoolwork." Borderline MOS:PUFF?
  • Reworded a little, do not think I can get rid of the words specifically without taking away the meaning of the sentence (that he was considered smart but did poorly in school). Kees08 (Talk)
• Link center in the article.
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• "He excelled in Navy flight school, and he served for several years as an aircraft carrier-based fighter pilot in the Navy. Conrad also served as a flight instructor in Navy flight schools along the Gulf of Mexico."
  • Cited Kees08 (Talk)
• Two links for Gordon Cooper in one section is a bit much.
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• "Both Pete and Jane remarried." and "Conrad met Nancy Crane, a Denver divorcee, through mutual friends. Conrad and Crane married in 1990." should be merged.
  • Any more info on Jane's remarriage?
• Reference 2 could be expanded to add ISBN, date published, etc.
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• Reference 6 needs to be in the same format as others.
  • Sorry, I do not understand? Kees08 (Talk)
  • Okay, done. Kees08 (Talk)
    • The reference isn't using a citation template unlike the others. You should change it for consistency.Nova Crystallis (Talk) 06:28, 26 February 2018 (UTC)
• Reference 28 needs an access-date.
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• Are there more sources that could back up References 29-32? Citing IMDb on its own is not reliable.
  • Hm, in this instance they fall under 'disputed uses' (though I do not see any links to discussions and if it will always be disputed..). I can make an effort to find other sources, if you want. Kees08 (Talk)
• Have you considered putting pictures in a image gallery? The photos in the NASA career section are stacking quite a bit.
  • Spread them around a bit. Kees08 (Talk)

Should be it for now.Nova Crystallis (Talk) 04:50, 23 February 2018 (UTC)