Talk:Patsy Torres/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:42, 12 July 2022 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will review this for you now! --K. Peake 07:42, 12 July 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• The pop music genre is not sourced anywhere in the body

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• Wikilink trumpet in the infobox

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• In the body, the label is identified as Joey Records but it is called Joey International here; which is correct really?

•  Done

• Patsy Torres Records is not sourced anywhere in the body

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• The vocal versality part should be sourced in the body while kept here, though the quote can remain as sourced in the lead

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• Wikilink trumpet

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• The wedding event is not notable for the lead

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• "by record promoter Albert Esquivel and released" → "by Albert Esquivel in 1980, after which they released"

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• "and after signing a" → "and she had signed a"

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• Pipe Budweiser to Budweiser trademark dispute

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• Remove the fact the song was written by her grandfather since that is not notable for the lead

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• You can merge the first number-one single part with the elevation into a successful singer sentence

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• Remove the names of the predecessors since these are not notable here

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• "During this time, Tejano music entered its golden age, and Torres was" → "At this point, Torres was" and only keep the pipe on Billboard itself plus remove the comma after the magazine

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• Remove the most-played on radio stations because this is not notable from just two songs

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• "the United States warning, children of" → "the United States, warning children of"

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• "she signed with" → "the singer signed with"

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• Pipe WEA Latina to Warner Music Latina

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• "Torres was the first female Tejano singer" → "Torres was the first Tejano singer"

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• "who helped expand Tejano music's" → "who helped expand the genre's"

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• The "Te Juro" part is not notable for the lead; rather start from the award sentence but as "In 1996, Torres won the Songwriter Award..."

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• Pipe BMI to Broadcast Music, Inc.

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• Merge the fourth para with the above one per overly short size

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• "Torres continues her" → "Torres has continued her" but this is not sourced as being ongoing in the body

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• "Torres received a doctorate in" → "The singer received doctorates in"

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• "who helped spearheaded" → "who helped spearhead" but this fact can be written out and sourced in the body's personal life section

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Career

Early life and career beginnings (1957–1982)

• "Her only musical influence" → "Patricia's only musical influence" per MOS:SAMESURNAME and to avoid starting two consecutive sentences with her

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• Remove commas next to William Torres

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• "several instruments and wrote songs, and who provided Torres" → "several instruments, wrote songs, and provided her"

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• "the saxophone, Torres joined" → "the saxophone, Patsy Torres joined" with the wikilink

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• Wikilink trumpet

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• Pipe Thomas Jefferson High School to Thomas Jefferson High School (San Antonio)

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• "a year later joined her sister's band, Blue Harmony, as" → "a year later, joined her sister's band Blue Harmony, as"

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• "Her sister influenced her" → "She influenced Torres"

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• "Torres eventually toured with Canales and the two bonded," → "The two eventually toured together and former a bond,"

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• "who signed the band in" → "who signed Blue Harmony in"

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• "provided the band with" → "provided Blue Harmony with"

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Music career success (1983–1991)

• Mention the year she signed with Cara Records

• The book does not provide a year she signed with Cara.

• Change to Budweiser and pipe to Budweiser trademark dispute

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• "She released her second album" → "She subsequently released her second album"

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• "The group disbanded in" → "They disbanded in"

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• "the singer remained touring" → "though the singer remained touring"

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• Pipe keyboards to Keyboard instrument

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• Wikilink bass guitar

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• Wikilink hard rock

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• "She produced her own music video" → "The singer produced her own music video" with the wikilink

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• Pipe Little Joe y la Familia to Little Joe (singer)

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• "Her single "Amor Con Amor"" → "The singer's single "Amor Con Amor""

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Advocacy and The Positive Force Tour (1990–1994)

• "Her Positive Force Tour campaigned" → "The singer's Positive Force Tour campaigned"

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• "includes mini skits," → "included mini skits,"

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• "She spoke out" → "Torres spoke out"

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• Pipe AIDS to HIV/AIDS

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• "She has inspired" → "The singer has inspired"

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• Does the received part mean she received this or her fans? If the latter, then reword but elsewise keep as current.

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• "female singer" while another" → "female singer", while another"

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• "three different national shows including" → "three different national shows, including"

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• "in University of the Incarnate Word where" → "in the University of the Incarnate Word, where"

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• "In 1990, she signed with" → "In 1990, Torres signed with" per this being a new para

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• Add what year the album was released

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• Pipe WEA Latina to Warner Music Latina

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• Pipe country to Country music

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• "She also became the" → "The singer also became the"

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• "She is considered a" → "Torres is considered a"

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• Introduce Con Todo El Corazon; is this her second studio album under the label, an EP, or something else?

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• "she helped the "Tejano wave" in 1994 with her "crowd-pleasing concerts."" → "the singer helped the "Tejano wave" in 1994 with her "crowd-pleasing concerts"." per MOS:QUOTE

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Decline of Tejano music (1995–present)

• The murder article should only be linked on "shooting death", so link Selena to herself

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• "Radio stations in the United States" → "Radio stations in the US" per MOS:US

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• Pipe regional Mexican music to Regional styles of Mexican music

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• "the song was chosen by" → "while the song was chosen by"

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• "of the city."" → "of the city"." per MOS:QUOTE

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• Pipe BMI to Broadcast Music, Inc.

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• "Torres signed with indie" → "Torres signed with indie label" with the pipe, also why is the label named differently here then in the infobox?

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• "She was named the" → "Torres was named the"

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• Pipe Mammogram to Mammography

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• "Mi Amiga" sponsored" → "Mi Amiga", sponsored"

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• Pipe Susan G. Komen Foundation to Susan G. Komen for the Cure

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• [35] does not back up all of the info before it

• Yes it does

• "She also served as" → "The singer also served as"

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• "and performed with symphonies." → "and perform with symphonies."

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• "to continue to dream"." → "to continue to dream."" since this is a full sentence

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• Pipe Mexican American to Mexican Americans

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• The gap sentence is not backed up by [38]

• Removed

• "album with the lead single" → "album, with the lead single" with the wikilink

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• "[in Tejano music]". showcasing" → "[in Tejano music]", showcasing"

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Personal life

• Remove comma before David Lucero, however the exact date is not sourced

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• "for Lucero in 1994, Torres" → "for Lucero in 1994; Torres"

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• "my one and only."" → "my one and only"." per MOS:QUOTE

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• "She believes in" → "The singer has belief in"

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Discography

• Good

See also

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks strong at 24.2%!!!

Works cited

• I'm not sure about the reliability of the YouTube video; is that really the account of the awards show because I see no verification?

• The official website does link it to their YouTube page.

External links

• Good

Final comments and verdict

• On hold until all of the issues are fixed; the lead stuck out as expansive but I made suggestions to help fix that! --K. Peake 10:00, 12 July 2022 (UTC)

• I have replied to some of your inquiries and fixed most issues. Best – jona ✉ 15:24, 17 July 2022 (UTC)

•  Pass now, I briefly copyedited but slick job from you! --K. Peake 08:00, 19 July 2022 (UTC)