Talk:Mussie/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: PresN (talk · contribs) 18:59, 11 December 2014 (UTC)

Reviewing this. --PresN 18:59, 11 December 2014 (UTC)

• Cute little article!
• The first paragraph is a bit sketchy on the "one or many" question- it's all written as if it's a single entity, like Nessie, which makes putting "number of individuals" as if it's a trait of a single individual read oddly.

• Done. Tezero (talk) 23:04, 11 December 2014 (UTC)

• "who is rumored to live in Muskrat Lake" - "which", you refer to Mussie as "it" or "the creature" everywhere else, so "who is misplaced

• "Which" wouldn't exactly be right, so I've gone with "that". Tezero (talk) 21:25, 11 December 2014 (UTC)

• "Canadian pioneer Samuel de Champlain wrote about it" - that + "in the early seventeenth century"

• Done. Tezero (talk) 21:25, 11 December 2014 (UTC)

• "fruitlessness" is a strange word to use

• Changed to "futility". Tezero (talk) 21:25, 11 December 2014 (UTC)

• Paragraph 2 of Characteristics is unclear as to how Mussie got there- I presume you mean that Muskrat Lake was once connected to the sea?

• Reworded. Tezero (talk) 23:04, 11 December 2014 (UTC)

• "Robison is as follows." - colon, not period

• Done, and moved the citation accordingly. Tezero (talk) 21:25, 11 December 2014 (UTC)

• "independently of the truth" - independent

• Done. Tezero (talk) 21:25, 11 December 2014 (UTC)

• Can you archive that pdf source? That doesn't seem like it will be long-term stable.

• Oddly, I can't. Wayback is completely down now and WebCite still isn't working. I'll put it on my Google Drive for safekeeping, like I did with those two YouTube videos from the Sonic X article, until I find a better way to store them on the Internet. Tezero (talk) 21:25, 11 December 2014 (UTC)

• A photo would be nice for the article - this flickr image, supposedly of Mussie, is free (CC-BY 2.0), and this one (directly discussed in the article) is not, but you may be able to ask the photographer to re-license it as CC or public domain.

• Added the first one. Tezero (talk) 23:04, 11 December 2014 (UTC)

Looks like a snapping turtle. 162.251.16.246 (talk) 07:57, 7 February 2021 (UTC)

--PresN 19:20, 11 December 2014 (UTC)

Alright, passed! --PresN 00:24, 12 December 2014 (UTC)