Talk:Moment of Surrender/GA1

GA Review

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I'm starting to enjoy reviewing these U2 articles; they're really exemplary work. I'll get on this soon.

Reviewer: Lampman (talk) 10:32, 5 April 2010 (UTC)

I've been there with my cell phone (shouldn't it be mobile phones, by the way?), and it's truly a great song. The article is well referenced and well written, there's just a couple of minor issues. First of all, the lead is really too short for an article this size. It should probably be about twice as long; there is nothing on "Composition" and "Live performances", and there could probably be a couple of lines more on "Writing and recording" and "Reception" as well. I also question the wisdom of a single-sentence paragraph at the end of the "Live performances" section. Apart from this it should be ready to go. Lampman (talk) 04:51, 6 April 2010 (UTC)

Your concerns should now be addressed. Thanks! Y2kcrazyjoker4 (talk) 04:19, 7 April 2010 (UTC)

Great, good work. By the way, I guess there were no images available? I looked at commons, but I couldn't find any concert images that seemed to relate directly to this song. Lampman (talk) 04:36, 7 April 2010 (UTC)

I actually took some photos during the one show that I went to. I didn't think much of them, but I have one shot of the "galaxy of mobile phones". I think another photo that we can use in the article is the free image in the No Line on the Horizon article of a riad - maybe it would be of value to put it in the Writing and Recording section here? Y2kcrazyjoker4 (talk) 05:05, 7 April 2010 (UTC)

The pictures are good; the article was a bit visually dull before. The problem now is that the text says nothing about the recording being made in a riad, and the caption isn't sourced. Can you add something here? Lampman (talk) 11:22, 7 April 2010 (UTC)

Ok, the prose in the article body is cited now. Y2kcrazyjoker4 (talk) 13:54, 7 April 2010 (UTC)

Great! Lampman (talk) 14:57, 7 April 2010 (UTC)