Talk:Cyclone Lua/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 22:06, 3 December 2013 (UTC)

• Any reason you left out the dates in the infobox?
• "Originating in a broad low pressure area which formed northwest" - "which" --> "that"
• "to close for well over two days" - how much over two days? Three days? Four?
• "but damage was limited by the lack of development in the storm's path" - since "development" could also be used in terms of the storm forming, perhaps use "population" instead?
• Could you clarify that "RAAF Learmonth" is an airport in Western Australia?
• If Lua didn't become a tropical low until March 2, why does the infobox have it start on the 9th?
• "though at around 0500 UTC" - what day?
• "Simultaneously, the JTWC issued its first tropical cyclone warning on 17S" - simultaneously to when? When did JTWC begin this?
• "and the storm attained its peak 10-minute maximum sustained winds of 165 km/h (105 mph)," - when?
• " Lua made landfall near Pardoo, about 150 km (95 mi) east-northeast of Port Hedland, at 3 pm Western Australia Standard Time (0700 UTC), while still at peak intensity" - what day?
• " Port of Port Hedland, the Port Authority" - to avoid saying "port" so many times, perhaps say "officials" closed, instead, and switch around the order of the sentence?

All in all, really good work on this. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 22:06, 3 December 2013 (UTC)