Talk:Cyclone Bobby/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 20:38, 6 July 2014 (UTC)

• " set numerous February rainfall records in parts of the Goldfields-Esperance regions of Western Australia, dropping up to 400 mm (16 in) of rain in February 1995" - maybe avoid saying "February" twice by saying "monthly" for the first usage?
• " with 1-minute maximum sustained winds of 205 km/h (125 mph)" - either you should be using 10-min winds, assuming it's BoM, or if it's JTWC, you should be using whatever the BoM said was the winds
• How can Bobby cause both $11 million in damage in AUS dollars and US dollars? Use this for 1991 USD from AUD
  • The difference was negligible. Cloudchased (talk) 20:51, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
    • Better? >_> Cloudchased (talk) 21:13, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
• "The origins of Cyclone Bobby can be traced to a tropical low which formed" - use "that" when it is a restrictive clause
• "strong eastward wind shear" - not sure if "eastward" is appropriate. That more implies direction. But if it's coming from the east, it would be easterly.
• "and producing in favorable conditions " - cut "in"
• "and attained Category 1-equivalent intensity on the Saffir–Simpson hurricane wind scale at 0000 UTC on 23 February, with 1-minute maximum sustained winds of 120 km/h (75 mph)." - as with before, you should specify if this is per the JTWC. I wonder, how come you don't mention when JTWC tracked it, and that you use their winds?
• "approximately 1000 Aboriginals" - "1,000"
• "where landing strips at Leinster and Wiluna were closed due to weather issues" --> "closing landing strips at Leinster and Wiluna"

All in all, a good read! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:38, 6 July 2014 (UTC)

Fixed all except one (see note). Thanks for the review! Cloudchased (talk) 20:51, 6 July 2014 (UTC)