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Latest comment: 5 years ago by Wetrorave in topic GA Review

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Avalanche United/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Wetrorave (talk · contribs) 20:53, 18 June 2021 (UTC)Reply


One more review for the day

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox

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  • Add the city and country where Studio 159 is located, in accordance with style guidelines of T:Ia#studio
  • Use Singles template here

Lead

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  • "I Am the Avalanche. I Surrender Records released the album on" > "I Am the Avalanche, released by I Surrender Records on"
  • "self-titled debut album" > "eponymous debut album"
  • "activity by the band slowed." > "the band's activity slowed."
  • "spent several months between February and July 2011 recording their next album" > "recorded Avalanche United between February and July 2011"
  • "features material written by Caruana and guitarist Mike Ireland." > "also features material written guitarist Mike Ireland." - since it was already mentioned that "Vocalist Vinnie Caruana went through a divorce and subsequently wrote an abundance of material.", there is no need to repeat it

Background and production

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Composition and lyrics

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  • "has been described as" > "explores"
  • "melodic hardcore,[7] and punk rock.[8]" > "melodic hardcore and punk rock.[7][8]"
  • "Caruana said: "[Avalanche United] stands" > "Caruana said that it "stands"
  • "is about dying young." - try to expand on this sentence: how exactly do the lyrics portray "dying young"?

Release

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  • Good

Reception

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  • "added, the music" > "added that the music"
  • "Blare included the album on their top 50 albums of the year list." > ""Blare ranked Avalanche United as the 42th best album on their top 50 albums of the year list."

Track listing

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  • Good

Personnel

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  • Good

References

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  • All Blare refs are dead; add |url-status=dead to them or replace the existing |url-status parameters on them

Conclusion

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On hold until issues are fixed—I may not be able to respond in the following days, but I swear I'll be here on Monday

@Wetrorave: Made the changes. Yeepsi (talk) 07:54, 19 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
@Yeepsi: I've been able to come back here on Sunday anyways, so here goes the GA.  Pass. Wetrorave (talk) 02:31, 21 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
  1. Though relatively advanced, I'm not a native English speaker, so you choose either "the band was" or "the band were"