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Nominator: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs)
Reviewer: Wolverine XI (talk · contribs) 19:56, 25 March 2024 (UTC)
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[edit]This article is a bit undercooked in some areas. Fear not—for I will assist you in correctly cooking this article to fulfill the needs of the hungry readers. Well, tomorrow that is.[Joke] Wolverine XI (talk to me) 19:56, 25 March 2024 (UTC)
- Many thanks. Chiswick Chap (talk) 00:29, 26 March 2024 (UTC)
- Reading now. Expect a review in 40 minutes. Wolverine XI (talk to me) 15:41, 26 March 2024 (UTC)
Review
[edit]- Why link male and females? Everyone knows the distinction
- Gone.
- In India, cattle are sacred animals. Needs more context
- extended.
- There were over 940 million cattle in the world in 2022. in => by
- Edited.
- Cattle are responsible for around 7% of global greenhouse gas emissions. Cattle were one of the first domesticated animals to have a fully-mapped genome. Don't start two consecutive sentences with the same word
- Fixed.
- kept on farms to produce meat, milk, and leather, and sometimes to pull carts or farm implements. What does this have to do with its physical attributes?
- Moved.
- Nothing about horn, skin color, body measurements, exceptional individuals.
- Added.
- Calves prefer their own mother's vocalizations to those of an unfamiliar mother. Unfamiliar mother?
- Edited.
- but less good at localising sounds than goats, and much less good than dogs or humans. Don't like the sound of "less good"
- Edited.
- Any reason why evolution is in that position?
- We have the biology first - characteristics, behavior, genetics, evolution; then we have the human-facing aspects from husbandry to culture.
- Poland, in about 1627. in about?
- Fixed.
- The meat of adult cattle is known as beef, and that of calves is veal. is veal => as veal
- Done.
- Other animal parts => other body parts
- Fixed.
- If the calf is male, it generally is slaughtered at a young age to produce veal. it generally is => it is generally. Sounds better, IMO
- Fixed.
- Around 22 litres per day is average in the UK. is average => on average
- Edited.
- BSE can cross into humans as the deadly variant Creutzfeldt–Jakob disease; 178 people in the UK died from it. Date? This can easily expire.
- Added.
- For "in culture", what about literature and media portrayals?
- Added.
References
[edit]- Hasheider 2011 needs page nos.
- Replaced ref.
- Hopper 2014 needs page nos.
- Identifies chapters.
- Coetzee 2013 needs page nos.
- Added.
- Grandin 2015 needs page nos.
- Added.
- Doyle & Moran 2015 needs page nos.
- Added.
- Glyn & Julian 2002 needs page nos.
- Added.
Well, that took longer than expected. I guess I'm a slow reader, but the important thing is that I got the review done in a timely manner. Good work, almost GA-quality. Wolverine XI (talk to me) 16:54, 26 March 2024 (UTC)
- All done to date, many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 21:05, 26 March 2024 (UTC)
Driveby comment
[edit]- I think the Science Direct source should be replaced, based on this discussion. Esculenta (talk) 18:18, 26 March 2024 (UTC)