Talk:Vampire Money/GA1

GA review

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Nominator: NegativeMP1 (talk · contribs) 21:04, 1 September 2025 (UTC)

Reviewer: Pi.1415926535 (talk · contribs) 21:50, 30 September 2025 (UTC)

I'll take this review. Please respond to comments with {{done}}, {{not done}}, etc. Note that I may make some suggestions that are beyond the GA criteria - my aim is to make the article as good as possible - but I will only pass/fail based on the criteria. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 21:50, 30 September 2025 (UTC)

@NegativeMP1: Review is complete. Prose mostly just needs copyedits; the sources need some cleanup. Placing on hold. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 00:31, 3 October 2025 (UTC)

@Pi.1415926535: Thanks for reviewing this article! I've fixed the issues noted below (with extra notes if needed) and filled out the references where needed. λ NegativeMP1 01:27, 3 October 2025 (UTC)

Great work, passing now. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 02:46, 3 October 2025 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

• all members --> all four members
  • Done.
• experiences on getting --> experiences of being
  • Done.

Background and production

• Are any further details available about the band being asked to be on the Twilight soundtrack (in particular, by who)? Statements like other people the band knew are awkwardly vague.
  • I agree, but it's also not known who was requesting the band to make a song for Twilight. It's been implied to be the filmmakers themselves beyond the label/distributors, but I didn't really find a reference that specifically backs that up without some sort of speculation.
    • Misinterpreted this a bit and also worded it poorly. I've went ahead and just cut the vagueness part and added an extra reference backing up that they "received offers" to write a song for the score.
• the band wrote / in reference to his belief - the pronouns don't match
  • Fixed.
• as produced --> was produced
  • Fixed.

Composition and lyrics

• namely Chuck Berry, Jerry Lee Lewis: use "and" instead of a comma if there's only two listed
  • Done.
• The citations for Among these references... and the next sentence seem to be reversed.
  • Fixed.
• The Alt Press source is somewhat speculative about the Misfits reference ("Too close for coincidence, right?"). I would recommend removing that sentence unless a more clear citation can be found.
  • Fair enough. Cut.

Critical reception

• they further described Does Spinks use they/them pronouns? Other articles using this citation use she/her.
  • Fixed.
• In more critical review of Danger Days... Incomplete sentence.
  • Fixed.
• bands seventh - missing apostrophe
  • Fixed.
• seventh best out of fifteen - this is somewhat misleading, as it was listing the 15 best songs, rather than 15 being the entire discography. Also needs a hyphen after seventh.
  • Removed the "best out of fifteen" bit.

References

All reference numbers are from this version.

• I would move the Bryant source inline with the others, rather than using Harvard-style for a single source that's only cited twice. {{rp}} can be used for the page numbers. The Bryant source also doesn't need via Google Play, since the version on that site is not being linked to.
  • I went ahead and just got rid of the source entirely actually. For this specific page it actually doesn't help out that much. Although I will clarify that the "via Google Play" part was there because that was the version of the book I have access to. And page numbers typically vary with eBook editions.
• A number of sources have missing/incorect parameters; please double-check all sources.
  • Sources 9, 12, and 15 are missing authors
  • Sources 2, 7, 9, 13, 14, and 15 are missing dates
  • Source 3 appears to be missing details as well; it's not even clear what form of media it is.
    • Removed this one entirely because everything in this part of the article is backed up by Stuff and the NME TV one is unnecessary.
  • Source 11 has incorrect author parameter
  • Source 6 is missing publisher
  • For sources 2, 9, 12, and 14, write out the website name rather than www.stuff.co.nz and similar
• All online sources were spot-checked. Aside from issues noted above, two didn't verify:
  • Source 2 doesn't contain the "chasing that fucking money" quote. (A similar quote appears in source 7).
    • "That's why the song Vampire Money is on there, because there's a lot of people chasing that f**king money."?
  • Source 9 only indicates the listener is intended to be on the joke (in general), not specifically the anti-Twilight joke.
    • Adjusted, although I think the wording with this bit is a bit awkward without that clarification.

Overall

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check.

   a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

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