Talk:Look Outside/GA1

GA review

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Nominator: SapphireBandit (talk · contribs) 00:50, 13 May 2025 (UTC)

Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 08:58, 23 June 2025 (UTC)

Will review soon. Jaguar (talk) 08:58, 23 June 2025 (UTC)

Lead

• "leading to its developer Francis Coulombe working with others" - Coulombe has already been introduced, so I would delete the emboldened text
• " the full version of the game was simultaneously announced and released by video game publisher Devolver Digital" - remove, the publisher was already introduced
• The lead summarises the article well, so no issues here

Body

• "...using the RPG Maker game engine, with its music being made by Eric Shumaker" - this would be better if broken with a full stop
• "Francis had been in contact with video game publisher" - informal, use his surname in all instances
• "announced by Devolver Digital and released to Steam on March 21, 2025" - on Steam
• "...compelled to move forward, with Lucas White of Shacknews similarly describing the game" - this is a very long unbroken sentence which would read better if split. Eg. compelled to move forward. Likewise, Lucas White of Shacknews described the game...

Overall this is a well-written article and is comprehensive enough to meet the GA criteria. The sources are all of high quality, and it was a smooth read. Other than those minor points raised, I see no reason to put this review on hold, and will promote it outright. I still highly recommend you implement the changes, though they do not subtract from the criteria. Well done. Jaguar (talk) 10:44, 23 June 2025 (UTC)