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Reviewer: Averageuntitleduser (talk · contribs) 23:54, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
Here goes! Comments coming shortly. Averageuntitleduser (talk) 23:54, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
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Well-written
[edit]I had no idea how entertaining these television articles were, now I understand why you edit them!
succesful at obtaining
— "successfully obtained"which are currently operated by Bell Media under the CTV 2 banner
- What do you need here?
- I... I quite honestly have no idea myself
- What do you need here?
It was competing
— this could be construed as a business rivalry instead of two competing bids. I had to reread this section to understand "The AltaWest bid" part.The AltaWest bid was part of CanWest's bid to turn Global into a third national network and envisioned a main station in Calgary.
— two things: "envisioned" is conflicting tense-wise, and the sentence is a bit confusing. CanWest, on their own, hasn't been established, nor has their bid. As well, the article leads you to connect "CanWest" and "Global", so referring to them seperately is a bit odd. I was thinking something like: "CanWest Global's plan to turn itself...", but I imagine its not technically correct.- Reworded to better clarify this. Since you're likely to ask: our article is Canwest, but they styled it CanWest for most of their history.
- Looks better.
- Reworded to better clarify this. Since you're likely to ask: our article is Canwest, but they styled it CanWest for most of their history.
- Live @ Five with spaces, or Live@Five without?
- With. Fixed. (They were inconsistent.)
Many of the issues came down to the tapeless playback and editing system
— I would clarify/hammer home that, using the system, many news stories ended up lost from the hard drive.- What's "BBM"?
- It's Numeris now. Linked.
lagged the CBC
— is this a common phrase? If not, use "lagged behind".- Isn't "lagged behind" redundant? You're behind if you're lagging.
- that's fair lol
- Isn't "lagged behind" redundant? You're behind if you're lagging.
Craig established the A-Channel Production Fund
— when? I'd consider moving/incorporating this section elsewhere, as it feels a bit out of place.- Moved this up several paragraphs and added a reference. The fund was started before the stations were on the air.
- Explain The Big Breakfast at first mention.
bring the licence terms of its Alberta and Manitoba stations in line
— perhaps: "renew the licence terms"?- No: they wanted them to expire at the same time, so Craig had the A-Channel (Alberta) licences come up early. Clarified.
- Ah, got it.
- No: they wanted them to expire at the same time, so Craig had the A-Channel (Alberta) licences come up early. Clarified.
@AverageUntitledUser: Addressed all items, but there's one you left no action item on. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 18:49, 12 March 2024 (UTC)
- @Averageuntitleduser Oops. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 18:50, 12 March 2024 (UTC)
- Forgive that one; the changes look good! Averageuntitleduser (talk) 19:35, 12 March 2024 (UTC)
Verifiable with no original research
[edit]Citations are fully formatted. All passages are cited to reliable newspapers, primarily local to Edmonton or Calgary. I've looked at a handful of sources and have found little close paraphrasing or copyvio. However, I have three quibbles.
an aggressive, urban, street-level, younger approach
— I would emphasize this more in the articleAt one news conference, a local politician saw an A-Channel cameraman enter the room and began mouthing his words without speaking.
— I'm likely missing something, but I couldn't find this in the source.- Second page of clipping, first column, toward the top.
- This is probably a little late for me to realize that you could link to multiple pages, but anywaysss
- Second page of clipping, first column, toward the top.
adding 20 games to the latter's existing 28-game inventory.
— should "20" and "28" not be swapped?- Yup. Good catch.
Spot-check
[edit]- Matella, Helen (December 1, 1993). "Alta. channel promises local programs". Edmonton Journal. Edmonton, Alberta. p. C8. Archived from the original on November 21, 2023. Retrieved November 21, 2023 – via Newspapers.com.
- Looks good

- Looks good
- Helm, Richard (September 19, 1997). "A is for A-Channel: Edmonton gets its first TV station in 23 years". Edmonton Journal. Edmonton, Alberta. p. TV Times 4. Archived from the original on November 21, 2023. Retrieved November 21, 2023 – via Newspapers.com.
- Indirect, but looks good

- Indirect, but looks good
- Blakey, Bob (June 25, 1997). "A-Channel: Rarin' to go with movies in prime time". Calgary Herald. Calgary, Alberta. p. C8. Archived from the original on November 21, 2023. Retrieved November 21, 2023 – via Newspapers.com.
- Looks good

- Looks good
- Blakey, Bob (September 20, 1997). "A-Channel goes on air with party". Calgary Herald. Calgary, Alberta. p. K2. Archived from the original on November 22, 2023. Retrieved November 22, 2023 – via Newspapers.com.
- Indirect, but looks good

- Indirect, but looks good
- Helm, Richard (May 7, 1998). "CFRN keeps a lock on the ratings: Despite meagre numbers, rookie A-Channel pleased with upward trend". Edmonton Journal. Edmonton, Alberta. p. C4. Archived from the original on November 22, 2023. Retrieved November 22, 2023 – via Newspapers.com.
- Looks good

- Looks good
- Blakey, Bob (May 21, 1998). "A-Channel keeps funding promise". Calgary Herald. Calgary, Alberta. p. C6. Archived from the original on November 23, 2023. Retrieved November 22, 2023 – via Newspapers.com.
- I'm only seeing "A-Channel Drama Fund", looks good otherwise.
- @Averageuntitleduser: the name changed about 2002: see . Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 21:25, 12 March 2024 (UTC)
- Looks good within the article now
Averageuntitleduser (talk) 12:11, 13 March 2024 (UTC)
- Looks good within the article now
- @Averageuntitleduser: the name changed about 2002: see . Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 21:25, 12 March 2024 (UTC)
- I'm only seeing "A-Channel Drama Fund", looks good otherwise.
- McConnell, Rick (August 3, 2005). "Citytv rebrands in bid to boost audience". Edmonton Journal. Edmonton, Alberta. pp. C1, C2. Archived from the original on November 23, 2023. Retrieved November 23, 2023 – via Newspapers.com.
A little more emphasized,(edit: the second page of the other source confirms it) but it works
Broad in its coverage
[edit]All of its activities are discussed wholly, using a wide variety of refs over a long timeframe.
Neutral
[edit]Looks good on this front. Opinions, like those of the workers on strike, are attributed and presented fairly.
Stable
[edit]No recent content disputes or edit wars.
Illustrated
[edit]Images are all correctly labelled as creative commons, own works, or public domain. The logo and buildings all improve the understanding of the reader.
Summary
[edit]A very pleasant read, great work!
- @Sammi Brie: Nice job! I think its just that one comment then; refs 29 and 30 (and I imagine more) mention the channel's younger target demographic, I just think you need to lean into it within the article (so that it works with the lead). Averageuntitleduser (talk) 23:54, 12 March 2024 (UTC)
- @Averageuntitleduser Housekeeping: pings don't work unless you sign in the same edit. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:50, 13 March 2024 (UTC)
- huh, thank you Averageuntitleduser (talk) 12:00, 13 March 2024 (UTC)
- @Averageuntitleduser I reshuffled a paragraph to call out some existing facts on "hip! young!". Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 05:48, 13 March 2024 (UTC)
- Read through it, and I quite like it; consider this a pass! Averageuntitleduser (talk) 12:11, 13 March 2024 (UTC)