Talk:Ralph Townsend/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:08, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Are you still going to review this, The Rambling Man? It's been over 2 weeks..... Snuggums (talk / edits) 04:26, 28 July 2015 (UTC)

Comments very interesting, and well written.

• Avoid single-sentence paragraphs, like the opening para and last para in the lead, and the penultimate para in the "Advocate of non-interventionism" section and the last para of the Arrest section and last para of the Post-war section. Done
• You have a single citation in the lead, which is a little odd. Presumably the information is expanded upon and referenced in the main body and as it's not a quotation, I would remove the lead cite. Done
• It's a personal thing, but try to avoid pipelinking to a redirect as you have done for " propaganda organization funded by the Japanese government" which you've piped to "Jikyoku Iinkai" which redirects to "Japanese Committee on Trade and Information". Done
• Notable work in the infobox should be in italics. Same comment for "communist takeover of China". Done
• "insatiable greed" this is bordering on not being entirely encyclopedic since you're not directly quoting him here. Done
• I generally look for why I should pay attention to a particular commentator's opinion, like "Owen Lattimore ", you could introduce him as a scholar of China and Central Asia for instance. Done
• "doing advertising work " never keen on "doing". Done
• Again, "who seek to crush Japan as a bulwark of capitalism in Asia" this is in need of a quote or it needs to be toned down. Done
• Times of India is The Times of India. Done
• "1937–1941" year ranges like this usually don't repeat the century so 1937–41. Done
• "Then on 28 January" not sure you need the "Then..." Done
• No need to pipelink Japanese Committee on Trade and Information to redirect back to itself. Done
• Nye image caption is a complete sentence so needs a period. Done
• "US government" vs "U.S. entry" - be consistent. Done
• the Washington Post should be The Washington Post. Done
• Remove the See also links that are already linked in the article. Done
• Where are all the works referenced? As pretty much none of them have articles or ISBNs, how can I verify them? Done
• Are all those external links really required? Done

I enjoyed the article immensely, it's certainly very close to good article quality, so I'll place it on hold for a while to see if we can address some of the comments. The Rambling Man (talk) 06:38, 28 July 2015 (UTC)

Thank you for your review. Is there anything else I can do to improve the article?CurtisNaito (talk) 18:08, 29 July 2015 (UTC)

CurtisNaito sorry it's taken so long to get back to you, I'm satisified with your edits, so I'll pass to GA. Good work. The Rambling Man (talk) 06:55, 13 August 2015 (UTC)