Talk:Jonah/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 18:37, 25 January 2018 (UTC)

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 18:37, 25 January 2018 (UTC)

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

• 1

  1.a Y

  1.b Y

• 2

  2.a Y

  2.b Y

  2.c Y

  2.d Y (27.5%, but this is only because one paragraph is cited directly from bible in both article and source.)

• 3

  3.a Y

  3.b Y

• 4

  4.a Y

• 5

  5.a Y

• 6

  6.a Y

  6.b Y

• No DAB links Y
• No Dead links Y
• Images appropriately licensed Y

Prose Suggestions

• Yahweh commands the fish to vomit Jonah out. suggest Yahweh then commands the fish to vomit Jonah out..
• Yahweh again commands Jonah to visit Nineveh and prophesy to its inhabitants. suggest Yahweh again commands Jonah to travel to Nineveh and prophesy to its inhabitants.
• which decrees fasting, sackcloth, prayer, and repentance. suggest which decrees fasting, the wearing of sackcloth, prayer, and repentance.
• Even the king comes off his throne to repent. suggest removal; the king previously ordered the people to repent, whereas this makes it seem like he was the last to repent.
• and demands for Yahweh to kill him unless this is directly in the source, id suggest pleads, as it seemed more of the tone to me.
• it exaggerates the size of the city of Nineveh to an implausible degree[1][17] and incorrectly refers to the administrator of the city as a "king". you can remove the citation after implausible degree, as they share the same citation as the end of the sentence.

I am going to leave the citations, since the statement may be controversial to some and, without the citations, people might challenge it. --Katolophyromai (talk) 17:34, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

• That is all my suggestions. Passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 15:06, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Also please fix ref#46, it's currently Ziolkowsi 2007 instead of Ziolkowski 2007. -- Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 15:09, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Finnusertop has already taken care of this criticism. --Katolophyromai (talk) 17:51, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

• Non-reviewer comment: Katolophyromai, please address what is (in References) "Walton, Armerding & Walker 2005" but "Walton, Armerding & Walker 1985" under Bibliography. The ISBN points to a 1985 edition, but the linked Google Books edition is from 2017 and with an entirely different ISBN (ISBN 978-0-310-53196-8). What edition the page numbers are from, I have no idea. – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 16:09, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

I have now fixed the reference. --Katolophyromai (talk) 21:20, 30 January 2018 (UTC)