Talk:Ray Jennison

GA Review

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Nominator: BeanieFan11 (talk · contribs) 20:35, 8 February 2025 (UTC)

Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 19:32, 9 February 2025 (UTC)

I'll take this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:32, 9 February 2025 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Comments

• Regarding the first sentence, you need to clarify that American is his nationality. I think you do this on your other bios.
• Sentence 3 and sentence 4 of the lead both start with "He later", can you switch one up?
• I would just summarize "in Paris, France, and London, England." as "in Europe." in the lead.
• last name to "Jennison." I believe the quotation mark goes inside the period on this type of quote.
• Jennison played for South Dakota State's you add SDSU is the previous sentence, recommend using it here instead of spelling out the full school name again
• "huskiest linemen,", same as above, I think the quote goes inside the comma
• Green Bay Packers of the National Football League you can just use "NFL" here
• He later remarried to Mary Garnett Jennison -> He was later remarried to Mary Garnett Jennison
• References:
  • Add access-dates to Ref 4, 18 and 25
  • Ref 16 is missing the |via=Newspapers.com
  • References are consistently formatter and reliable for what is being cited
  • Spot checks: 3, 4, 7, 8, 15, 16, 23, 24, and 25 all checked out

Nice work BeanieFan11. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:53, 10 February 2025 (UTC)

• @Gonzo fan2007: I think I addressed everything. BeanieFan11 (talk) 19:50, 12 February 2025 (UTC)
  • Passed. Nice work! « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 20:15, 12 February 2025 (UTC)

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Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by AirshipJungleman29 talk 12:45, 9 March 2025 (UTC)

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Jennison, c. 1929

• ... that NFL player Ray Jennison (pictured) legally changed his last name from "Jenison" because "people were always misspelling it"?

• Source: TB Times

• • ALT1: ... that Ray Jennison went from "Bozo" to being a colonel? Source: a play on his nickname, "Bozo" (), and that he later became a colonel ()
  • Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Bersey Electric Cab
  • Comment: To complete QPQ within 24 hours.

Improved to Good Article status by BeanieFan11 (talk). Number of QPQs required: 1. Nominator has 299 past nominations.

BeanieFan11 (talk) 18:37, 17 February 2025 (UTC).

• This might be my 300th DYK. BeanieFan11 (talk) 18:40, 17 February 2025 (UTC)
• Congratulations on number 300, BeanieFan11! This article, promoted to GA on Feb 12, is new enough, long enough, well-sourced and copyvio free. Both hooks are in the article and cited. IMO the first hook is more interesting. Good to go. Best, Tenpop421 (talk) 22:25, 20 February 2025 (UTC)