Talk:Randy Terrill

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I made this article because i believe he is widely known enough for his controversial amendments and house bills. Maybe i'm wrong, but i'm just taking initiative. As i'm not very experienced with this, It will need alot of editing to come up to standard.

Thanks Tristanjay (talk)

I think it is a good thing you are doing, but I think the article may be nominated for deletion soon as it is shorter than most stubs. Might I suggest you whack up some basic info from http://www.okhouse.gov/committees/Member.aspx?MemberID=69 or http://www.randyterrill.us/ and, if possible, add a few citations--TimothyJacobson (talk) 01:09, 19 April 2010 (UTC)

Exactly - the person may be notable, but you need to help find some references. Also - words like "controversial" really can't be used without a reference.  7  01:10, 19 April 2010 (UTC)

I have tried to make the start of the article a bit more grammatically correct for you, but I didn't know how to amend the second half. This is mainly because (as an Englishman who had not heard of the guy til earlier tonight) it is not clear to me whether "HB1804, an anti-immigration bill and An English-only bill" refers to one bill, two, or three.--TimothyJacobson (talk) 01:13, 19 April 2010 (UTC)

If someone could clarify the above point for me, hopefully I can amend accordingly--TimothyJacobson (talk) 01:18, 20 April 2010 (UTC)

They're two seperate bills. i tried to put in more references and added a info table using the information found in a government source. Anyone is welcome to help if you can, i even increased the size a little bit and added links to other articles. Tristanjay (talk) 18:20, 28 May 2010 (UTC)