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Latest comment: 10 years ago by Tonystewart14 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: SilkTork (talk · contribs) 19:08, 24 August 2015 (UTC)Reply


Review after rewrite

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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. Has an appropriate reference section:
    B. Cites reliable sources, where necessary:
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused (see summary style):
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:


Comments on GA criteria

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Pass
  • The language is neutral and factual, and the facts are presented in sufficient detail to indicate balance and openness. (Though some of the information can be trimmed, and I am prepared to help out with that). SilkTork ✔Tea time 16:16, 8 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • The article topic covers a lot of territory, and the article does well in bringing in the main points. Editors could continue to discuss what points should be mentioned, and what could be left out, and consideration could be given, as I will discuss in the focus section, on sub articles to deal in greater detail with some aspects of the topic; however, I am satisfied that for GA criteria, the article does meet broad coverage. SilkTork ✔Tea time 14:10, 14 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • While there is still room for improvement on the lead, I am satisfied that it does cover or at least touch on the main points of the article, and it now provides a comfortable overview of the topic such that a general reader could get an idea of what is going on. SilkTork ✔Tea time 14:10, 14 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • The article goes into close detail in places, and editorial judgements need to be made. I have trimmed down the article such that I feel that no section is so overly detailed that it will prevent this article from being listed as a GA. However, for ongoing development editors need to pay attention to the overall length of the article, and the amount of detail contained here. The general reader cannot always be expected to deal easily with a lot of detail in a single article. While there are a number of areas where detailed and nuanced explanation is helpful, consideration could be given to creating sub articles to provide the extra nuanced detail with balanced discussion on points raised, leaving behind just a summary in order to allow the general reader to get a quicker and better understanding of the bigger issues - see WP:summary style. SilkTork ✔Tea time 14:48, 14 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
Query

*It appears my concerns regarding the images have been overlooked during the rewriting. I will resolve them now. SilkTork ✔Tea time 08:35, 2 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Where I can I am going back to original sources and uploading the files to Commons with appropriate file information and copyright tags. Where I can't find the original source, or there is some other problem, I am removing the image from the article so the matter can be resolved later. As noted above, File:Tom E Watson.jpg doesn't have a standard summary form, and is missing essential information, such as date, so I went to the source given, but the file there does not hold relevant copyright information: . I did a search for the file, and found a copy on Flickr, but it is coprighted: . I have done a search on Flickr and found this file: , which has no copyright restrictions so can be uploaded to Commons and used. But I don't know if it is appropriate. In the meantime, I am removing the current file image of Tom E Watson from the article. SilkTork ✔Tea time 09:34, 2 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
The trial photo appears to be copyrighted so cannot be used, and should be removed from Wikipedia. . SilkTork ✔Tea time 10:19, 2 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
I'll look into the copyright status of these images. They should be public domain as they were published before 1923, although I'll have to verify this. It might be worth noting that the user on Flickr can simply check "copyright" without it actually being copyright, and I believe this is the case here. Tonystewart14 (talk) 18:37, 2 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
I found that the trial photo was taken by Walter Frank Winn of the Atlanta Journal, and a black and white version of it was published in the July 29, 1913 issue. I also confirmed my suspicion through private correspondence with the Flickr user that the image might not actually be copyright, but that person just left it tagged as copyright by default. I'm sure that other Watson image is also published before 1923, although our Tom (North Shoreman) might be able to confirm that. Tonystewart14 (talk) 21:10, 3 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
OK, thanks. I found it. I'll update the image page, and return it to the article. SilkTork ✔Tea time 09:23, 8 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

*Focus. I have a memory of asking you guys to provide a bit of context for the trial, and I can see you've worked on that. My concern now is that the Social and economic conditions section goes into a little too much detail, and also perhaps a little off topic. I will see what I can do to help focus and trim that section. SilkTork ✔Tea time 16:03, 8 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

I'm also a little concerned that the article has grown so much. While I did want an expansion of detail, it seems to have grown rather larger than I expected. SilkTork ✔Tea time 16:08, 8 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
I think the article could benefit from a tighter focus, but I am comfortable that no section is so inordinately over-detailed to prevent a GA listing. SilkTork ✔Tea time 14:48, 14 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

*Broad coverage. The article is much more detailed now, though as I plan to roll up my sleeves and do some content work, I think it's worth bringing in those who were arrested but not tried. Though by itself, I wouldn't fail the article for not including them. SilkTork ✔Tea time 16:08, 8 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

This is a small matter, and is editorial judgement. I'm not going to hold up a listing because of it. SilkTork ✔Tea time 14:10, 14 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
Fail

*The lead section still does not give an appropriate summary of the article. Some people will not have the time or inclination to read the whole article (which would take the average reader over an hour, which is beyond the average concentration span), so it is very important to provide the reader with a decent summary of the important facts. SilkTork ✔Tea time 15:47, 8 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

I wanted to be able to finish this today, but things keep landing on my desk in real life. I am in Oxford for the weekend, but hopefully I may have time tomorrow or at least when I get back on Monday to help out with the lead. I really want this GAR to be finished! SilkTork ✔Tea time 16:03, 8 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

General comments

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  • After looking into the images a bit I can see that some of them are copyright violations. I appreciate you guys have worked well on this article, but I flagged those images for concern a month ago and they are still there. I have to stop now as I have a few other things to deal with. Please check the remaining images in the article. If they don't have appropriate sources which reveal their true copyright status they need to be removed from the article. If images with uncertain copyright status remain in the article after seven days I will close this GAN as a fail. This is now a priority issue. SilkTork ✔Tea time 10:19, 2 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • I'm working on the article today with the hope and intention of closing the GAN as a pass, so I'll be dealing with any remaining issues. While looking into the image I came across this newspaper headline: File:Leo-frank-police-have-the-strangler-headline.jpg which mentions an Arhur Mullinax. Mullinax is not in the article, though a search for Mullinax and Leo Frank throws up over 500 responses. While the GA criteria does not require the comprehensiveness of the FA criteria, it does require broad coverage of the main aspects of the topic. What a general reader would expect to find explained in the article. Mullinax does not appear to be significant, and provided all else is generally covered I wouldn't fail for not mentioning him, though it would seem appropriate to mention him in the Police investigation section - I assume he is the unnamed "friend of Phagan". I also note that a Gordon Bailey was arrested but is not mentioned. Again, it seems this is not a significant omission, though I feel the article would benefit from being a little more complete with some of these facts. SilkTork ✔Tea time 10:18, 8 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • Good work. The article has progressed, and we are very close to listing. The areas that need attention are a) Building the lead to give an appropriately detailed summary of the article, sufficient to provide the general reader with a satisfactory overview - this is the priority; b) Trimming some unnecessary detail; c) Including some detail on the other men arrested - this is minor, and I wouldn't quibble if it wasn't done. I think all this is quite achievable in a few days, and I'm willing to help out on the work. I would hope that the article can be listed before the end of next week. SilkTork ✔Tea time 16:22, 8 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
How helpful for the lead would reverting this edit be? The deleted material directly relates to the type of evidence presented at the trial.
I did make it a point to not include the names of characters with limited impact on the overall case. For example, if you mention Mullinax, the natural questions are why was he arrested and why was he released. According to Oney he had an alibi established by his "sweetheart" and his original arrest was based on a report by "a myopic meddler [Edgar Sentell]." Mullinax admitted to knowing Phagan and having had a bit of a crush on her. There are lawyers on both sides that were added to the legal teams after the trial who I have chosen not to name. Close followers of the Frank case will notice that George Epps is not mentioned -- he was given publicity at the time but he had little impact on the actual evidence because his testimony was largely discredited. To put him in proper context would probably require a paragraph. I see right now that you're involved in trimming the details and so far every change you've made seems to me to be an improvement. Perhaps a way to add details that some readers might be looking for is to add the info to footnotes as we've done in other cases. Tom (North Shoreman) (talk) 17:58, 8 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
Yes, adding to footnotes is a method that is used when there is additional, interesting or explanatory information that would otherwise bog down an article. SilkTork ✔Tea time 12:56, 9 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • Mary Phagan's childhood home and place of birth. Phagan's date of birth was cited to findagrave, which is not regarded as a reliable source - Wikipedia:External_links/Perennial_websites#Find-a-Grave, so I changed it to the first book source I could find. I noticed that the place of birth in the book is given as Marietta, Georgia, though in the article we have Florence, Alabama. Researching some more I find that, yes, Florence is the true birth place, though sources give Marietta as that was her childhood home, and that is where Frank was lynched because it was Phagan's childhood home. But in the article we have the childhood home as East Point, Georgia. I'm having trouble getting a reliable source on the family moving from Florence to Marietta, but have now come upon the poorly written Murder of Little Mary Phagan which on page 14 says the family moved from Florence to Marietta. Where do we get East Point from? In our article the only time that Marietta is mentioned is for the lynching, when we say that it was Phagan's home town. But in the Mary Phagan section we say her home town was East Point. I'd like to get this cleared up please. SilkTork ✔Tea time 23:33, 12 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
OK. I've now got the details. Mary Phagan Kean and Steve Oney slightly disagree on the date (Oney says 1907, Kean says after 1910) the family moved to East Point, so I say in or after 1907. SilkTork ✔Tea time 02:26, 13 October 2015 (UTC)Reply


Pass

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This is a complex and difficult subject, and all those involved in bringing the article so far, including those who have criticised the article at various stages, are to be commended for their input and their work. I have paid particular attention to concerns of bias, and have attempted in giving advice to editors, and in working through the article myself, to make it as balanced and neutral as possible. Though we must all be aware that bias can be quite subtle, and we are all human and will sway our views and sympathies one way or another. What I feel this article should not do is try to argue one way or another that Frank was guilty or innocent. It should reflect the important facts about the case, and the discussions and differences of views afterwards. That I feel the article does quite well. SilkTork ✔Tea time 14:48, 14 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Thanks again to you, Tom, and everyone else here for your exhaustive work. I'm sure the article will continue to develop and the new content will mature a little in the coming months, but I think we can all take a deep breath now that the review is finally over. Tonystewart14 (talk) 00:41, 15 October 2015 (UTC)Reply