Talk:Kurt Loder/GA1
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GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman 16:03, 18 November 2009 (UTC) Here are the issues I found with the article:
- The lead should be two decent paragraphs, or extend the first. Not a long article but it feels like it brushes across everything barely.
- "He spent two years in college "and just hated it"." where did he attend college?
- It feels like almost every sentence has a quote. Quotes are good, but overkill isn't; try to reword a few into your own prose.
- If his tenure at Rolling Stone was as legendary as it sounds, I would think that there would be more on his career there; expand that section a bit.
- The article seems to jump from job to job, without really mentioning why he left any of them. Some probably can't be found, but I'm sure one or two have rationales noted somewhere.
- WP:PERSONDATA should be added.
It's certainly not a bad article, but I feel that it needs more work done. Try to expand the article in general on top of what I've noted above. I'm going to fail this; it can be re-nominated after the above is fixed. Wizardman 16:03, 18 November 2009 (UTC)