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Latest comment: 7 years ago by Spintendo in topic Discography

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Please consider including this additional information to supplement the current skeleton for this page. I have left citations that currently exist in their respective numbers without the links. However, I have provided references links for the new information. Thank you

Thank you for your time, effort and consideration. Confident Camel (talk) 05:40, 12 February 2019 (UTC)Reply


Reply 12-FEB-2019

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I was unable to implement your edit request for two reasons:

  • The prose has not been written in WP:FORMAL tone. Providing greater assistance in this matter would go beyond the purview of a simple edit request, but I am able to provide two examples below. For more in-depth help with writing an article which uses formal tone I would suggest reaching out to editors at the Biography WikiProject. Two quick examples of problematic prose:
  1. "Anticipating the civil war, his father raised enough funds through the community to travel to Italy with the hopes of finding a better life outside of Somalia. His family fled to Italy in 1989 before the onset of the Somali Civil War. When they arrived in Italy, Knowmadic and his 3 older brothers were forced into boarding schools where they felt a tremendous culture shock." The prose as it is written here conveys too much emotion. This emotion makes the article sound less formal in tone. A better example would be to state that the family left Italy and that the four children were educated at boarding schools.
  2. "He partially chose the name because his father was a nomad and his mother was a farmer, both from Mogadishu. His grandfather was a nomad too. He combined the words because he wished to acquire, seek and distribute knowledge, a poetic ode to his forbearers." This prose is too conversational in tone, as it reads similar to how one would speak to a listener ("His grandfather was a nomad, too"). Because readers of this prose will be reading it to themselves and not actually listening to a speaker face to face, this tone detracts from the information by confusing the context of where it is being read. In this example it would be better to simply state that the name is a portmanteau of the words knowledge and nomadic.
  • The provided references are not formatted correctly. On this point I am able to offer more in-depth assistance. The citation style predominantly used by the Knowmadic article is Citation Style 1 (CS1), while the citation style used in the edit request consists of bare URL's.[a] Any requested edit of yours which may be implemented will need to resemble the current style already in use in the article – in this case, CS1. In the extended section below titled Citation style, I have illustrated two examples: one showing how the edit request was submitted, and another showing how requests should be submitted in the future:

If you could rewrite the references so that they resemble the second example shown in the collapsed section above, it would be much appreciated. After the prose has been re-written in a more formal style, please feel free to re-submit this edit request at your earliest convenience. If you have any additional questions about formatting please don't hesitate to ask myself or another editor. Regards,  Spintendo  08:30, 12 February 2019 (UTC)Reply

Notes

  1. The use of bare URLs as references is a style which is acceptable for use in Wikipedia. However, general practice dictates that the style already in use for an article be the one that is subsequently used for all future additions unless changed by editorial consensus.[1]

References

  1. "WP:CITEVAR - Wikipedia:Citing sources". Wikipedia. 20 October 2018. Retrieved 22 October 2018. It is normal practice to defer to the style used by the first major contributor or adopted by the consensus of editors already working on the page, unless a change in consensus has been achieved. If the article you are editing is already using a particular citation style, you should follow it.

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I have made the requested edits specified by the editor. Please consider using this new and comprehensive information. Thank you for your time, effort and consideration.

Confident Camel (talk) 03:35, 14 February 2019 (UTC)Reply

Reply 16-FEB-2019

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Below you will see where proposals from your request have been quoted with reviewer decisions and feedback inserted underneath, either accepting, declining or otherwise commenting upon your proposal(s). Please read the enclosed notes within the proposal review section below for information on each request.  Spintendo  16:07, 16 February 2019 (UTC)Reply