Talk:Karanis

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Great article! I like the detail given about the town's layout and the temples. Maybe you could add more detail about the what the preserved papyri talked about and find some example authors. Also maybe you could add a bit about current excavation projects and work done on the papyri. ATurk 03:22, 15 May 2007 (UTC)

Kim, this is a really strong article and I especially like how many sources/references you have (it adds to the credibility). Also, great job including links to other relevant pages--that really helps the reader. Just a few things to think about improving. One, there are a couple of small grammar issues. Several sentences in the first section where you talk about the papyri are long and get a bit confusing. Maybe you could break some of them up. Also on the grammar note, you might divide the article into sections as that would also add clarity for the reader. It is a little dense and hard to read through as it is. On a second note, I would consider putting the first quote you have ("it was one of...Fayum basin") into your own words. The quote is not information that cannot be put into your own terms. It is sort of background stuff (just a thought). Other than that, GREATTT JOBB!!! This reads well and is very informative. Al-vickers 20:57, 15 May 2007 (UTC)Alexandra Vickers