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Latest comment: 3 years ago by Jake-jakubowski in topic Advertisement

Jake-jakubowski (talk) 20:36, 17 December 2022 (UTC)Reply

Promotional tone

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@Quatchenerlo Would you be willing to discuss what portions of the article you considered to be written in a "Promotional tone". thanks. Jake-jakubowski (talk) 21:27, 17 December 2022 (UTC)Reply

Hello @Jake-jakubowski, the section of the article entitled "Inspiring others" has a promotional tone. Quatchenerlo (talk) 00:47, 18 December 2022 (UTC)Reply
Thank you, I'll rewrite it. Jake-jakubowski (talk) 00:52, 18 December 2022 (UTC)Reply
@Quatchenerlo, I edited it, if you would mind reviewing. If tt's satisfactory, if you also wouldn't mind removing the 'Promotional tone' template, Bill Curtsinger. Thank you for letting me know. Jake-jakubowski (talk) 01:19, 18 December 2022 (UTC)Reply
@Quatchenerlo, I edited it, if you would mind reviewing. If tt's satisfactory, if you also wouldn't mind removing the 'Promotional tone' template, Bill Curtsinger. Thank you for letting me know. Jake-jakubowski (talk) Jake-jakubowski (talk) 18:03, 19 December 2022 (UTC)Reply
Hi @Jake-jakubowski, thanks, I just removed the template. Quatchenerlo (talk) 00:24, 20 December 2022 (UTC)Reply
Awesome, thank you! Jake-jakubowski (talk) 00:34, 20 December 2022 (UTC)Reply

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I left the following feedback for the creator/future reviewers while reviewing this article: Very nice job on the article! Keep up the good work.

Onel5969 TT me 15:44, 24 December 2022 (UTC)Reply

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@Actualcpscm: Could you be specific as to which parts of the article are considered an advertisement and wording that promotes the subject in a subjective manner? I can reword or delete those areas. thank you. Jake Jakubowski (Talk) 11:59, 13 June 2023 (UTC)Reply

I took out a lot of the exhibitions as that might have led to looking like an advertisement. i also swapped out the picture of the exhibition. Jake Jakubowski (Talk) 09:57, 14 June 2023 (UTC)Reply
Something I'm still worried about is that a lot of the purported achievements are OR. For example, the paragraph beginning "The subjects of Curtsinger's stories have included..." provides an extensive list of subjects, but it is supported only by primary sources. Actualcpscm (talk) 11:29, 14 June 2023 (UTC)Reply
@Actualcpscm: ok, gotcha. I will work on that today. Thank you Jake Jakubowski (Talk) 11:36, 14 June 2023 (UTC)Reply
@Actualcpscm Ok, I think I fixed it. I downgraded the paragraph to avoid wp:puffery and used secondary sources. Jake Jakubowski (Talk) 16:22, 15 June 2023 (UTC)Reply
Great stuff, thanks! Actualcpscm (talk) 17:01, 15 June 2023 (UTC)Reply
Thanks Jake Jakubowski (Talk) 21:37, 15 June 2023 (UTC)Reply